Hi Ahmed
A good introduction to your essay.
Suggestions for improvement:
1. Erase The paragraph on the space ship-youb were not supposed to include anothers student's presentation as your essay. Your essay is based on your own findings from the research websites. Write a paragraph describing what Ryan did to make a change in the lives of people in Africa.
2. Now write a conclusion based on the guidelines from the Essay Structure handout.
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